Hello and welcome to AFF! I guess you are new here ^_^ or perhaps an old member that never publish her work!
emm... I just wanted to tell you that: the kinkier the better! :D It's been a while since the last time we had a kinky fiction here in AFF and I almost follow all M/M fictions and have to say I do miss them! :P
So, you can imagine that I lit up when I read your profile! So, I am sooooo looking forward for your updates and from what I can guess, judging from the first chapter, it's going to be hot! ;)
what a wonderful beginning and truly interesting characters. You have a way with words and a style of writing that belongs in published fiction. I cannot tell you what a breath of fresh air it is to see someone write a story with a plan on character development. I can't wait to read more and thank you for posting =)
There definitely needs to be a subscription button for this site, just for stories like this.
Another beautifully written chapter. I love the short, easy descriptions. There isn't any fluff in your words, which I appreciate. Fluff is good for describing emotions, but it gets irritating when setting a scene. I'm loving this. A lot. I don't know whether to hug or throttle Luca and I suspect that Ryder will eventually have that same problem =D.
Ch. 1: OMG, I love the premise of this story. It's very well written. So far, Luca is a bit of a devil/child. I can't wait to find out what he's been kicked out of three schools. Also, Ryder seems very sensible, honorable, and loyal. I'm suspecting Luca's dad is either dead or no longer in the picture.
Well, I gotta say, I'm intriqued...cannot wait to see what happens. Ryder is gonna have his hands full with trying to tame Luca. I am with his Mother...I want to slap him too and it's only been two chapters!But I am really looking forward to how these two get together and how they handle a relationship. I'm thinking that Luca is gonna want Ryder so bad he will have to change but the journey to that change...well..it's gotta be hot! Right????
But I have to tell you, I've read a lot of books an a lot of short stories and what drives me crazy is the flow. One sentence there's kissing and in the next someone is screaming. Now, in the author's head, I'm sure it makes sense, but to the reader, jumping like that is annoying and keeps me from reading the rest of the story.
I can already tell you know what your doing and know how to write. I kinda wish that I had found this story when there were more chapters posted cause I don't want to wait.You probably should try to sell this that's how good I think your writing is.
Really looking forward to reading the rest of the story. Keep up the good work.
I hope the next chapter is soon and is full of sex...let's get these guys going!! LOve M/M!!!
Ch. 2: I just read your profile. SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!! Seriously! OMG. I hope you write more delicious stories like this one. I'll be in heaven! You are setting this story up to be amazing.
My favorite line: “None of my business. I get it. And I’m not going to question your authority. But just so you know, if Luca had a type, you’d be it. He’s going to come at you hard. So for your sake, I hope you’re crazy heterosexual.” Not even close.
AND Jacob is going to be rooming next to Luca? Oh shit!
I am really looking forward to learning more about what Luca has done in the past, what happened to his father, and why his mother is a heartless bitch. And a little about Jacob Ryder's background would be nice too.
AdultFanFiction.Net is not in any way associated with or related to FanFiction.Net
The views, activities, and lifestyles portrayed in these fictional not-for-profit stories in no way reflect the opinion, activities, or lifestyle of the WebMasters or the majority of the AFF Community. Each original story's copyright is held by the Author of the story and you should contact that Author with any questions or comments on their work. The WebMasters are not responsible for any of the content found in our archives.
The WebMasters always reserve the right to delete (or not) anything at their whims, but especially in the case of purposely inflammatory stories or non-fiction posts, trolling and/or inflammatory Author/User/Troll accounts. By entering these Archives you are stating that you are 18 years of age or older and that you are allowed to view adult material in your area. If you are underage or if Adult Material offends you, please Go Elsewhere.
